My favorite chapter so far. Lots of great sentences; great undercurrent of conflict between Tommy and Jude; great overt conflict with the meathead—with some great dialogue; and the depiction of what seems to be Tommy’s descent was really well handled.
thanks Peter, you're really getting into the tail end of it now! tommy's descent I really wanted to be gradual and more gradual still... you'll see how it ends up.
My favorite chapter so far. Lots of great sentences; great undercurrent of conflict between Tommy and Jude; great overt conflict with the meathead—with some great dialogue; and the depiction of what seems to be Tommy’s descent was really well handled.
thanks Peter, you're really getting into the tail end of it now! tommy's descent I really wanted to be gradual and more gradual still... you'll see how it ends up.