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"We were ripe avocados who were still green and gone soft, but not yet brown on the inside."

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A great way to bring it all back from the Granpa’s art studio. I really liked this chapter

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thanks ricardo—yup, the avocado is definitely a motif. this is one of my favorites as well. def a turning point along with the next one

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having had family reunions for 65 years - this is so perfect! well done

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thanks cathy! i hope you like the rest of the novel and it doesn’t make you too sad then :)

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Ah, what a beautiful chapter. Youthful idealism at its finest. And yet… discouraged, crushed. The world needs beautiful things…

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thanks Jenn... it's one of my favorite chapters. has my fave music track too. so fitting

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It was beautifully and lovingly crafted, I could feel it as I read. ❤️

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My favorite chapter yet.

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thanks peter. this is def a good one and a turning point. i like the music for this one too!!

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Me too

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This is a wonderful chapter, Clancy. Really wonderful.

"...what Tommy said was extremely naïve and very clichéd, but the poignancy lay in daring to say it." And what a speech it was! Beautifully written

"Life is about your loved ones and your passions." Often we do not realize the truth of this until we are very old.

BEST LINE EVER: "I hate this fucking family.."

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Oh yes: "Really, what Tommy said was extremely naïve and very clichéd, but the poignancy lay in daring to say it." I like the way the narrator's judgement interjects at times.

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Thanks!! I like that one too :)

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